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Just like I said before it's a good way to go, things will be much better if there's the full story though but well take your time ^__^

I was really writing fiercely today... but then ex-parents dragged me out of home for a stupid occasion. >_>

Well dang...sure is tough if things were going on like that~

But I'm impressed on how you're able to achieve many great things despite the limitations =_=b

I'm rather impressed with the detailed attention. Its quite short but very descriptive in identifying the two characters. I think you did an amazing job on both detail, description, and catching my attention. Is this one of your side projects you are working on?

Oh yeah, I'm planning to make a guide about storywriting sometime but kinda too lazy to write it lol~

The notion behind it comes to the saying 'best way to learn is to teach', I don't know if people might need it tho~

^ The more you try to understand, the more confused you become!



Lack descriptions? The entire thing is made up of descriptions! Ahaha. That aside, adding descriptions of what the girl was doing (just happened to be standing there alone?) and perhaps replacing the 'It felt like an eternity as I had marched up to her' with a bit more detail could help build up a lot of atmosphere. The time it takes for him to walk from where he is standing and the girl is a march with his eyes locked, his palms sweating, his mind racing, etc.

I'm not the greatest writer around (actually quite far from that), so take the advice with a grain of salt. It's quite hard to say what's wrong, or suggest improvements on something that's already on such a high caliber >.>

@High: Well... most of what I wrote were from what I wrote before I had to go out. But yeah, when I'm writing like that, it takes only hours to wing out a finished piece. And yes, all that descriptions; out in like an hour. FUK MAH FATE, IF ONLY WE DIDN'T GO OUT, I'D HAVE LIKE 5 HOURS TO WRITE THIS.

@Vega: Right now, it's my only project. It's a 'summer' entry for the lulz. It'll try to fit in every rules of my contest. Emphasize on 'try'. :D

And thanks.

I can't really suggest improvements, mostly just telling them what I actually think lol~

I'm more of an ordinary reader than a critic, and I look forward to enjoy the stories rather than simply 'finding what's wrong'~



I didn't even count on how long did I wrote shit lol, I usually just sat here and type around for a few minutes then quickly closed the Open Office. Repeat the process whenever I had some inspiration goin~

Eh...? I dunno if that's true. >_>;

And thank you for the advice! I have something new to consider when I edit that specific part next time! It's really helpful.

So guys, let me ask you some questions~

If you would like me to write some storywriting tutorial, on what aspect you want to make me write about?

Aspect as in?

There's many kinds of stuff, like Concept, Character Development, Descriptions, Scenario, Twists, Romance, Comedy etc...etc... you name it~

I know that I'm not good enough yet to write a tutorial, just looking forward to learn things that I could take note for myself~

Wouldn't a tutorial include like... everything?

Also, been thinking about making a second version of Zeph's classroom on the writing forum.

That would be too much for me lol, besides I'm not an all-rounder when it comes to storywriting~

Oh that, I could kind of see that coming...good luck I guess?

Then, in my opinion, you shouldn't. Just leave it to someone who can do it, I suppose.

See that coming?

And thanks.

Zeph's classroom? Wazzat?

Well I'm only going to include things I'm familiar about, and by writing all that I've learned in an informative way I think I can somehow improve my skills too~

Yeah, kinda...I don't know how to put it tho

The awesome:

https://www.fakku.net/viewtopic.php?t=38846

Wow look it's me down there =D

Yeap, yeap.