d(^_^)(^_^)d wrote...
"The axe went clean through. The arm fell to the ground, a useless lump."
It happened so fast it took a second or two for the victim to realize what happened.
First example is how I like the action. Blood is optional. The second example shows the reaction and the thoughts, and I love that. The screams made me feel uncomfortable, I doubt that from pain of having an arm chopped, one would still be conscious, so it made it feel unrealistic in my head.
I am perfectly fine with the second more detailed version. I'm not so cool with the version with the girl.
The content is definetly more discomforting that the action itself. Damn, now I'm looking forward to 2014's Halloween.
high_time wrote...
even if it's kinda unpeasant and disturbing, you should try and show the worst possible aspect of humanity the best you can. That way we can have can have breakthroughs every once in a while and to keep broadening our own horizons.
Amen.
His laughter went throughout the night, and as I heard his own laughter, I masturbated myself to sleep
Reminds me a bit of Filthy Frank.
Edit:
@Leonard: That one rustled my jimmies.